This blog is about a dialogue scene I read this story Hills Like White Elephants (Ernest Hemingway) to help me better understand how to write this type of scene with dialogue and symbols with hidden meaning within the story that gives you a better understanding of what that story really is about I hope you enjoy reading and in the comments below tell me what you liked what you didnt and what I could change Her Decision She was scared, she was nervous, but she was mostly fearful, she was shivering like it was 20 degrees even through it was only 70 degrees in her room, she was siting in her bed wrapped up in her blanket shaking with fear she couldn't think straight her mind wondering all over place she couldn't even put two and two together. Her sister was sitting on the other bed across from her yelling at her with venom in her mouth
" You have tell him" her sister said " I know I do but I cant do it" she replied back shuddering " Well you have till Saturday to tell him otherwise mom will tell him" her sister snapped back If only she knew how hard this choice was for her to make, if only she knew how many times she ran this through her head how she thought about all the options she had to choose from and how everyone of them was hard to pick except for the one she knew was right for her. Her breathe started to come back to normal as she thought about her choice and how over time that one thought made her nervous but now made her believe this was what God wanted for her, she believed there was a reason why he would do this sort of thing to her. once her sister brought up their father again she starting getting knots in her stomach and her breathe went uneasy again " How could you be so stupid " said her sister " This is a mistake you need to take back" With that being said anger started to grow inside of her and made all the blood in her veins boil she angrily replied" Why so everyone else can be happy and I have to live with regret of a choice I was force to make??" Her younger sister spoke with that venom again and said "This isn't about who it makes happy but what's best for everyone, Like it or not you need to tell dad he has every right to know" As she listened to her sister go on and on she thought about all the times she tried to talk to her dad about anything. Her dad wasn't the easiest person to talk to like her mom was he had a bad habit of speaking before thinking and this was why she was never so good with telling her father things big or small because there would always end up being an hour long lecture on whatever the subject was good or bad "Hello are you even listening to me or you just gonna stare into space" says her sister annoyed " I said you need to tell dad what's going on and hope he doesn't kill you or disown you" she says with a smirk She looks at her sister with annoyious but also a little concerned she looks down at her hands and realizes the whole time they have been talking she has been scratching which meant her anxiety was acting up which meant she was freaking out big time " Fine " she says " Fine Ill talk to him and tell him whats going on" Her sister smiles " Good do it " THE NEXT DAY
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kaitlyn
9/24/2018 07:45:04 pm
great post!!!! You are really good at writing
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Taylor Dannaker
9/24/2018 08:45:19 pm
great description, I was hooked from the beginning.
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Sabatino
9/25/2018 07:25:28 am
This post provides a clear introduction to contextualize the assignment. Also, I see how description and dialogue help to recreate a scene from your storied life. I assume this is a present scene from your life. If so, I am curious to know why you wrote this scene in first person? What does the story gain from this choice?
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